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Great job on these two chapters! As Bellejour said, the DC gang works pretty well in the Dirty Dancing story. I love the way you are building the relationship between Pacey and Joey. Not too quickly, not too smoothly. Nicely done.

Here are some of the reasons I really appreciate your way with words:

>>After a moment of hesitation he sat down beside her and gently knocked his shoulder against hers when she didn't acknowledge him.<< Awwww, so perfectly Pacey/Joey. Very reminiscent of the scene on the dock at the end of Like a Virgin.

>>Her hand on his chest was causing a revolution inside<<

>>his voice was like a blanket to snuggle under on a cold night when he wasn't having a go at her.<<

>>allowing himself to indulgently revel in the smooth silk and delicious smell of her skin<<

>>feeling a tug between them as if they were magnets.<<



The other thing I really love is the bits and pieces of canon that you've managed to fit into this story like:

>>She's the kind of beautiful that gives you butterflies you know?'<<



One thing, I hope you don't mind me saying that you used "loose" for "lose" in a couple of places. You said you didn't mind constructive criticism so I thought you would want to know.



Looking forward to the next installment. Thanks for posting.

ETA: Well I never refreshed my page so I didn't realize you had posted the whole thing. I won't be able to read the rest until tomorrow but can't wait! These comments are for Chapters 3 and 4.